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The graphic below illustrates the change of a public
park
 that was
first
 opened in 1920 compared to recent
date
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. Overall, Grange
park
 has two entrances from Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street. The
park
 has the main landmark in the
center
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 of the
park
. In the western part, the
park
 has been designed for a music purpose, whereas, in the eastern part, there hasn't had a clear feature. In 1920, the fountain was located at the
center
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 of the
park
, while, nowadays, it is changed to be a rose garden
that is
 surrounded by seats. In the west area of the
park
, it used to have a stage for musicians.
However
, it is reconstructed to be the Amphitheatre for concerts. At the northern right corner of the
park
, pound for water in 1920 is replaced to be a children's play area. A Cafe is installed
next
 to the area.
Next
, the glasshouse which was located a the right of the Eldon Street entrance has been changed to be a water feature.
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