With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their meals Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

People
are getting so much busy nowadays for
few
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a few
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particular
reason
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reasons
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. For saving their
time
in working
hour
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hours
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and during gossiping, most of the
time
people
are having fast
food
. I will elaborate benefits and drawbacks with relevant
example
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examples
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. In
this
modern world,
people
are getting fast
food
easily by ordering
in
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online. During working hours
people
are having mouthwatering
fast
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fast-food
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food
pizza,
burger
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burgers
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,
sandwise
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sandwich
sandwiches
and many others. They
are easily fulfill
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are easily fulfilling
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their hunger in
short
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time
which is good.
Beside
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buying
people
are making fast
food
for their kids and invited
guest
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guests
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.
For example
,
few
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a few
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month
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earlier I went
Malaysia
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to Malaysia
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to meet my best friend, where he
live
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alone. Because he lives alone so
instade
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instead
of
cook
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cooking
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at home, most of the
time
he
buy
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buys
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fast
food
from
market
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the market
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or online, which may
fulfill
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fulfil
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his hunger but
this
is not a good way. It could impact badly on his health.
Additionally
. Nowadays,
people
are being overweighted for having fast
food
frequently, and affecting with many
desease
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disease
diseases
. Some reliable recharger from
UK
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the UK
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, publish their recharge paper
on
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the guardian newspaper. There they mention 60% of
people
are being fat for having fast
food
and damaging their
stomac
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stomach
badly.
Beside
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these
people
are having many other
problem
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problems
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such
as gastric and
disesting
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digesting
. To sum up.
Fulfill
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hunger is important but having
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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fastfood
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fast food
are
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is
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so bad
our
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for our
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body.
People
should not eat fast
food
on daily basis.
Be
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healthy is more important
then
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than
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eating mouthwatering fast
food
.
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