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Some people think that e-books are the death of paper books while others think that paper books will never disappear.Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Today
technology
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 starts to
ruling
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 the world where each element
start
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 to change in line with
technology
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 to captialized the new
market
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 opportunities and make sure to survive in the
market
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.
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 of e-
books
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 is a perfect
example
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how
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of how
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tehnology
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technology
 involves in different industries. Today
mixes
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mixed
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 kind of believes exist in the current
market
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 where few
people
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thinks
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think
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 that
e
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ebook
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book
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 going to
the
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be the
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 future of the
book
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publication
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publishing
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 industry
where as
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whereas
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on the other hand
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 few thinks that can be still able to read the
books
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 in hard papers. Development in the internet connection is the main root cause for the development of
smart phone
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smartphone
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, computers and
tables
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tablets
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.
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 based on those development replacement for hard copies starts to create
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an
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and
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an
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e
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e-book
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book
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 in
a
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apply
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one of
those
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example
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. Nowadays
people
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 feel more comfortable and find very
convinance
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convenience
 about the
useage
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usage
 of the e-
book
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 where they can get required information or can read any
books
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 at any given time slot.
This
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 forces to make the un-productive hours to more productive hours.According to the recent publication by
world
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a world
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 large
e -
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ebook
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book
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 company indicating that there was a 25% improvement exist in the number of
user
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users
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 compare to
last
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 year.
However
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 introduction
take
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takes
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places
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place
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 in
early
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the early
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 20s
however
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 in the society still we have a population who like to read
book
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bascially
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basically
 in
hard
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the hard
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paper
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,
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apply
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 because their
use
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 to it and find more comfortable with it.
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 those
eldery
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elderly
older
generation
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generations
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 think until they are alive
news
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newspaper
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paper
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 will
be publish
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be published
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 in
hard
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the hard
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paper
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.For
an
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apply
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example
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aging
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ageing
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 population
more
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is more
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 than 50 plus only the target group for the existing
paper
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book
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pubilishing
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publishing
 company. Every
industries
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industry
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 works with profit purpose where each company owners start to think
how
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about how
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 to
maxmize
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maximize
 their current sales and ensure
the
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apply
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sustainable sales figure in future too.
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shareholder
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shareholders
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also
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are also
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 keen to
use
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 the current able
technology
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 to maximize the
opportunties
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opportunities
exist
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that exist
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 in the
market
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.So I am strongly
belived
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believed
believe
belive
 that onwards
paper
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books
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 become as
a
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an
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 exhibition
intrustment
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entrustment
instrument
 and a lot of
people
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 start
use
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 e-
book
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 for their reading habit or improve their knowledge. In
couclusion
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conclusion
, I
brief
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briefly
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 explained the in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 period a lot of
people
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 start to
use
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e-
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the e-book
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book
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 as
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a replacement
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replacement
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replacements
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 for
the
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apply
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paper
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book
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 because they may feel more comfortable and can
utilized
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utilize
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 their unproductive hours especially when they are stuck in traffic or waiting for a friend.
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However
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 still small segment
having
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has
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 the habit of reading
books
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 but after some time when these
segment
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segments
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 fall under the unprofitable segment
then
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paper
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book
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books
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become
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becomes
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as
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apply
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a
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an
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example
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how
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of how
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technology
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 replacing the industries norms.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Adjustable font sizes
  • Built-in dictionaries
  • Environmentally friendly
  • Durability
  • Accessibility
  • Visual impairments
  • Tactile sensation
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Nostalgic value
  • Disconnect
  • Digital screens
  • Reading habits
  • Attentively
  • Retain information
  • Social and cultural experience
  • Economic disparities
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