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What are the main problems associated with using social media platforms ?

#media #platforms
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It is considered by many that usage of social media can cause sort of disadvantages. In my
opinion
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 fake
accounts
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existing
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the existing
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 problem.
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Facebook has been developed many
users
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 found that the fake account problem is constantly growing. It is argued by some that fake
users
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 steal your personal details and waste your time as well.
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 the biggest advantage is
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with
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 extortion created by scammers. Nowadays people have to pay attention while they respond to unknown
users
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. Attached files inside the chats might contain many computer viruses which are created to track their activity. Beware of these files as many
users
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 complain about stealing their logins and passwords for bank
accounts
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.
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 for the case mentioned above could be
development
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 of
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artificial intelligence. It can help with tracking fake account
users
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, A. I. can separate
aproprate
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appropriate
users
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 with fake
accounts
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 by
veryfing
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verifying
 their
indentification
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identification
 details. To
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summarise
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, fake
accounts
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in
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variety
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 of social media platforms
causes
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 many financial and personal damages. That's why we should put
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pressure on social media developers to expand artificial intelligence technologies.
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