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Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the possible solutions?

#people #home
It is argued that
people
 don't feel safe at their properties and on the outside.
This
 is because of
rising
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the rising
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 number of committed violence or forgetting to
addapt
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adapt
 their households in
proper
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a proper
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 way. Nowadays,
people
 tend to feel less safe around their households due to
constantly
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the constantly
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 growing number of home
invesions
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invasions
invasion
.
This
 is because of existing poverty disadvantages or different
society
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status
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statuses
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.
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, in my
family
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 no one has installed
security
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a security
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 system due to lack of money. The solution for it
migh
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might
 be the special government welfare
whichj
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which
 would cover some of the installation costs.
Secondly
, sort of the society
do
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 not pay enough attention to adapt their homes to be more secure.
This
 is because of not caring about the
security
 issues.
For Instance
, famous
american
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American
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 rapper Pop Smoke has been found killed and
burglered
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burgled
 in his Los Angeles mansion after sharing his location
in
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on
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 social media accidentally. Later on,
prosecutor
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the prosecutor
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 said that his mansion has been adapted in a bad way. That's why it is very
crutial
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crucial
 to focus on your personal
security
 at
first
, even if you are becoming rich and wealthy. To Summarise,
people
 tend to feel less secure at home or when they are out. It's caused by existing violence around and
people
 don't pay attention
for
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to
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 the
security
 issues. To solve
this
 problem we have to put more pressure on
government
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the government
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 for
development
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the development
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 of new welfare projects which will help
people
 to secure their households.
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