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Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the possible solutions?

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It is argued that
people
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 don't feel safe at their properties and on the outside.
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 is because of
rising
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the rising
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 number of committed violence or forgetting to
addapt
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adapt
 their households in
proper
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a proper
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 way. Nowadays,
people
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 tend to feel less safe around their households due to
constantly
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the constantly
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 growing number of home
invesions
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invasions
invasion
.
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 is because of existing poverty disadvantages or different
society
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status
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.
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, in my
family
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 no one has installed
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security
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a security
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 system due to lack of money. The solution for it
migh
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might
 be the special government welfare
whichj
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which
 would cover some of the installation costs.
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, sort of the society
do
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 not pay enough attention to adapt their homes to be more secure.
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 is because of not caring about the
security
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 issues.
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, famous
american
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 rapper Pop Smoke has been found killed and
burglered
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burgled
 in his Los Angeles mansion after sharing his location
in
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on
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 social media accidentally. Later on,
prosecutor
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the prosecutor
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 said that his mansion has been adapted in a bad way. That's why it is very
crutial
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crucial
 to focus on your personal
security
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 at
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, even if you are becoming rich and wealthy. To Summarise,
people
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 tend to feel less secure at home or when they are out. It's caused by existing violence around and
people
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 don't pay attention
for
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to
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 the
security
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 issues. To solve
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 problem we have to put more pressure on
government
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the government
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 for
development
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the development
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 of new welfare projects which will help
people
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 to secure their households.
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