Fewer and fewer people walk on a daily basis. What are the reasons and how to encourage them to spend their time walking?

Walking is the best exercise for the mind
as well as
for the body but ,
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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a
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the
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number of
people
going for
walk
going down day by day and there are several reasons for it,like lack of time, not finding
a
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company for a
walk
, physical limitations and least but not
last
is no mood of going for it.
For motivating
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To motivate
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to
walk
social institutions and
government
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the government
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should come up with a plan to give better job opportunities for those who go for a regular
walk
,more relief in taxation for staying fit and healthy, and special
pick up
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pick-up
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drives for those who do not have transport but want to take part in the
walk
. Everyone has their own reasons for not coming out for a
walk
,going to miss
favourite
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their favourite
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part of the drama ,
have
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having
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guests at home so I can not
make
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making
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it today, for students I have
deadline
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a deadline
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reaching
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for my assignments, Working
people
a day was hectic and I have drained out already,for housewife too much chores left to finish, young
people
have games on the computer to finish and the list will keep going for each and everyone for avoiding walking. To make a reverse trend for
people
to go for
walk
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a walk
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is one of the hardest tasks in my opinion and it requires
well planned
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and prepared ideas
with
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considering all age
group
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groups
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and
class
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classes
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of
people
starting from offering incentives to going for some light punishments taking into account how the participants doing well in walking. we can offer a community
walk
for promotional activities and snacks
at the end
of the
walk
. In ,conclusion there will be no one easy solution for getting
people
to go for
walk
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a walk
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but if we work hand in hand
then
there will be slow but definitive progress in the number of walking civilians.
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