Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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not important because

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work and have relationships with

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and abroad.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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cognitive abilities
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self-conscious
cultural awareness
global society
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competitive job market
foundational skills
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