In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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As new homes are required in many parts of the world and the countryside is the only space left for constructing them.

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some people, it is imperative to preserve the beauty of small towns and they should not be considered for housing projects. I completely agree with

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opinion for two reasons. First of all, remote areas hold natural beauty and rich biodiversity, predominantly, birds and

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species. A variety of species plays a vital role in the health of the whole ecosystem that exists in rural sites.

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, the existence of forests in villages has a number of benefits

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as they provide shelters for many animals.

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, as humans have already cut down an abundance of trees to build big cities,

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the countryside is now home to remaining forests and wildlife. Cutting them for housing developments will pose serious destruction to the whole natural environment.

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, the wilderness

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offers peace to many visitors. As cities cannot provide mental peace any longer because of the hustle-bustle of

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life,

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, citizens now prefer quick getaways to the up-country to especially feel what is like being outside the big towns.

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, rural places are ideal for spending weekends, and the presence of hill stations

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more attraction to tourists nowadays.

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, we already live in a fast-paced world

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humans are now in constant search of peaceful places with the surrounding greenery. In conclusion,

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undoubtedly building more residential areas is necessary to accommodate the overly populated earth, it is crucial to conserve the countryside.

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will prevent the planet from

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destruction caused by new developments. Ideally, a new birth-control policy should be devised to control the global population and

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mother nature.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph is focused on one main idea and that the essay flows logically from one point to the next.

coherence cohesion

Include a clearer introduction that clearly states your position on the topic and a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion.

task achievement

Provide more specific examples and data to support your points and make your arguments more persuasive.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

295 words

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