It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talent, for instance for sport or music and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In
modern
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world, if
people
focus on child's
abilities
, they would
provided
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situations for developing
that
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that talent
those talents
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talents
. Overall, some
people
born
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are born
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with specific
abilities
in
sport
or musician.
However
, someone claimed any child can be a superb musician or
sports person
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sportsperson
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.
This
essay will discuss these views. Possibly, based on my
view point
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viewpoint
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,
people
who are born with certain talent
such
as
,
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Selena Gomez in musician
filed
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field
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. She is a famous singer that has flourished when she was three. So, child's show their
abilities
in childhood at all.
In addition
, most successful guys in art or
sport
have
talents
since they were born.
Consequently
, stars in
sport
fields
such
as Messi
,
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was born with
a
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wonderful talent in football and he is a powerful player. So, most successful
people
have
amazing
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had amazing
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talents
since were born and others should
working
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hard to
being
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be
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a star. In spite, someone maintained that everyone can be a star and
success
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in
sport
or music. They believed trying more and
hard working
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hardworking
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are essential and have
preference
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a preference
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to
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for
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talents
or
abilities
. Based on
this
view, all children with education and
hard
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hardworking
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working
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can be a star, but in my eyes,
achieve
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goals in art fields and sports just with
hard working
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hardworking
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an education without any skills or
talents
are vain. To conclude, some
people
are born with certain
abilities
as
individual
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individuals
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and others without any
talents
should work hard and educate to achieve their
goal
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goals
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.
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