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There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

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people
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 suffer from
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 pollution in
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metropolis
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. There are some reasons behind
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 a phenomenon. In
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 essay, I will elaborate on the causes, and suggest effective solutions to tackle
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 issue. There are two major reasons why
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 contamination is common in megacities now.
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 and foremost, the growing demands in private vehicles and public transportation are the main contribution
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 in cities.
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 shows that the urban population is getting higher in recent years,
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 are more likely to commute via various transportation devices.
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,
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road traffic
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 will be a serious problem affecting
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’s daily life.
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, sources of
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 come from the leisure activities
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 as music clubs in
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the city
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 centre. These high-volume entertainments make extreme noises in public places which lower the quality of life in big cities.
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, there are various feasible measures
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 can largely help
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 to address
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 problems.
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, on a government level, installing low
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 asphalt on roads, using quiet tyres in public transport vehicles and promoting active travel like walking or cycling are useful methods to eliminate the effects
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. Meanwhile, from an individual perspective, we can choose more environmental-friendly transportation to commute in order to reduce
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 pollution.
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, the intimate collaboration between governments and individuals can resolve
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 from
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.
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, governments can arrange the
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 in an appropriate way,
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 urban planning. According to the survey, a significant number of cities and regions already have put in quiet areas, where
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 can go to escape
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city
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the city
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. In
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 way,
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 from enjoyment will largely decrease. In conclusion, a high number of vehicles and human activities create sound
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. The viable solution will be the cooperation between governments and individuals and
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 structure.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • traffic congestion
  • infrastructure development
  • public announcement systems
  • street performances
  • noise regulations
  • soundproof materials
  • public transportation
  • designated quiet zones
  • green spaces
  • buffer zones
  • public awareness
  • community efforts
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