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Write an essay about the advantages and disadvantages of technology at work.

Every place is using
technology
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 in order to make the
work
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 easier. Due to the advancement of
technology
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, it has become easier to
work
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 as the process has just been simplified.
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, it has both advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, using
technology
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 in the
workplace
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 bring many benefits for
people
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. The
first
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 thing is the
work
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 is done within no
time
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. The
work
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 by the computers is done in a jiffy which is a boon to mankind. The
second
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 thing is
time
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 and energy are saved when the
technology
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 is used for the
work
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, the computers just help in completing the task with a single click and that’s the best thing about the technologies.
People
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 can save a lot of
time
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 to do other tasks in life.
On the other hand
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, there are some disadvantages when we use
technology
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 in the
workplace
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.
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, it will make a person lazy and the human talent gets lost. In fact,
people
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 become lazy when they know that the
work
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 will be done by the
technology
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 installed and when a person completely depends on the
technology
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 at
work
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, he or she becomes dependent on it fully, without realizing that
time
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 never waits for anyone. In conclusion, above are some of the disadvantages of
technology
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 in the
workplace
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. Nowadays,
people
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 use a lot of
technology
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 in the
workplace
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 but it has two sides for
people
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. Everyone needs to make the best use of it in life.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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