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Some people think that the government should invest money teaching science than other subjects to make progress. Do you agree or disagree?

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Development in the world mostly depends on
science
 and technologies and some people are of opinion that government should invest all money teaching
science
 rather than other
subjects
, I partially agree with the above statement as
science
 can make progress by making new inventions but for overall
life
 ,experience one should have knowledge of other
subjects
 like sociology, history and literature and going to elaborate
further
 in
this
 essay. As everyone knows for making
life
 easy and getting new gadgets and inventions scientists and people work on
science
 and technology until they get their desired results and
this
 is counted as a real development ,
additionally
 those innovations make our
life
 more and more comfortable handling over those odd hard jobs to robots and electronic gadgets like snow blowing,vacuuming, washing and drying in households and assembling parts ,loading and unloading heavy machinery and instruments in industries.those gadgets make work and
life
 balance at home as well as at the job reducing physical and mental stress. But for the enjoyment of ,
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life
 we need literature, music ,dramas and arts which is not possible without the knowledge of other
subjects
 and for that government should divide its monetary resources by dividing into parts for scientific development and rest for other
subjects
 and branches to make balance in people's
life
. In , conclusion for all directional growth of society there should be a multidirectional approach ,rather than allocating funds on
science
 alone, that's why I partially agree with the statement of putting all the eggs in
science
 faculty.
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