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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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 in some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a
year
 after finishing school and before starting university studies and
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going
 to discuss pros and cons of
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year
 in
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opt out
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 for
gap
year
 between high school and university,out of those who go for taking
year
 break majority have already planned
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year
 ahead of
time
rarher
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 than following the trend,while rest just blindly go with
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year
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one import
year
 from the carrier pathway and who plan the
time
 frame nicely get maximum of it by gaining
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hand on
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 experience in the field and technologies they want to study,with additional references from the job place which makes their future job more secure after completion of university education and it was thought ahead they can have good rest towards the end of
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 as they got some extra cash from working on the job after saving for tuition fees. On the other , hand who just follow the trend do not have actual planning so they spend their valuable
time
 on visiting places of tourist destination , in partys and attending live games and shows which add neither to their experience nor to their knowledge or skills,
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 waste of
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 and resources as they end up
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 their savings in
such
 activities. In , conclusion planned
gap
year
 is a win-win for students future and carrier and following by closed eyes will make trash of one life years with
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 money and
student
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 will get
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 at the end of
year
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. so taking
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decision
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 is vital for students and if not sure they should consult parents, teachers and
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  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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