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Nowadays, some parents put a lot of pressure on their children. Why do parents do this? Is this a positive or negative development for the children?

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People have different views about how
parents
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 help their child to become a good person. while some people believe that they create too much
pressure
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 on their
children
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss some reasons for the mentioned statements and I believe that
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’ ruthlessness can create a negative development for their
children
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. There are several reasons why some
parents
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 create more
pressure
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 on their
children
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.
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 of all,
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 have only a purpose of wanting their child to have a better future. So they put trust and burden on the shoulders of
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 and hope they can have a good job and better life in the future.
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, some
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 want their
children
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 to implement their
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’ dreams which
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 could not do when they were young.
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, a parent's dream is to become a professional scientist but they could not achieve that. So they wish their
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 would get that for them. Regarding these reasons that are mentioned , I deem
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 will create a negative development for
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 with numerous opinions.
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, when
parents
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 put more
pressure
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 on
children
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, they might create more stress for
children
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. Because
children
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 use 100 per cent of their abilities to meet
parents
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 expectations.
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, they suffer from depression, and even severe consequences.
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,
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 might be able to have bad relationships with their
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.
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 is because
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 are still young, they are not able to suffer heavy
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 from
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.
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, they might have mental issues
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 as madness. In conclusion, from the aforementioned, I believe
parents
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 should not create more
pressure
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 on their
children
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. As
children
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 need to be healthily and naturally develop.

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