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Nowadays, some parents put a lot of pressure on their children. Why do parents do this? Is this a positive or negative development for the children?

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People have different views about how
parents
 help their child to become a good person. while some people believe that they create too much
pressure
 on their
children
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some reasons for the mentioned statements and I believe that
parents
’ ruthlessness can create a negative development for their
children
. There are several reasons why some
parents
 create more
pressure
 on their
children
.
First
 of all,
parents
 have only a purpose of wanting their child to have a better future. So they put trust and burden on the shoulders of
children
 and hope they can have a good job and better life in the future.
Secondly
, some
parents
 want their
children
 to implement their
parents
’ dreams which
parents
 could not do when they were young.
For example
, a parent's dream is to become a professional scientist but they could not achieve that. So they wish their
children
 would get that for them. Regarding these reasons that are mentioned , I deem
this
 will create a negative development for
children
 with numerous opinions.
Firstly
, when
parents
 put more
pressure
 on
children
, they might create more stress for
children
. Because
children
 use 100 per cent of their abilities to meet
parents
 expectations.
As a result
, they suffer from depression, and even severe consequences.
Secondly
,
children
 might be able to have bad relationships with their
parents
.
This
 is because
children
 are still young, they are not able to suffer heavy
pressure
 from
parents
.
Furthermore
, they might have mental issues
such
 as madness. In conclusion, from the aforementioned, I believe
parents
 should not create more
pressure
 on their
children
. As
children
 need to be healthily and naturally develop.
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