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some people believe that parents should teach their students to be good citizens ,however believe that school should do this .Discuss both views and give your opinion

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some masses think that
parents
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 should educate their kid to be a good national and some believe that
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 academy should aware the about that .In my ,view
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 should responsible for making a kid a good citizen. I shall share
both
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 views in the coming paragraphs.
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,
parents
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 are the important building blocks of the
child
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's upbringing juvenile is like a plant in which direction you will hold
initially
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, it will grow in the way you want it to be. Children have the capability of imitating and they imitate by watching their
parents
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 actions. It's important for a parent to teach the
child
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 good ethics and show him how to behave nicely with elders and younger ones. In
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 modern era,
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parents
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 work and they don't get much time to spend with their
child
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 .Here, school role comes in. children spent more time in the school as compared to home. Teachers help them in nurturing when the youngster is in the growing stage. Teachers are the ones whom the follow most and they can be an important aspect of their life by making them good citizens. By getting an education in schools , the children can take part in social activities, programmes etc which can help them in learning moral values of society and it will help them to nurture their mind in a positive way.
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, I concluded, that in my views
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 the parent as well as a school should play an important role in making the
child
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 a good inhabitant.
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