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Today family members do not eat meals together. Why does this happen? Is this a positive or negative development

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In the current modern world, particularly in large cities, people are too busy to have adequate
time
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 to eat at home compared to the past in which families mostly gathered around the table. To me, despite a few pros associated with
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 situation, it is absolutely a negative trend. As mentioned above,
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 of overpopulation accompanied by a competitive job market, higher standards of living and universal financial crisis, people tend to
work
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 harder which results in a shortage of free
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. Even though the majority of successful businessmen, scientists and artists follow
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 type of living, many of them are not delighted with it. Take a typical dual-income family as an instance, each parent works in a different location with different
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 hours and different times to commute. It is nearly impossible for them to manage the
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 they arrive home to have a meal.
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, families who do not eat together often suffer a lack of enough bonding because eating together is one of the core aspects of enjoying family relationships technically.
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, children brought up under these circumstances would encounter emotional insufficiencies
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 of not receiving enough attention and love from their parents. Research shows that the highest rates of truancy and delinquency happen in families which do not gather to share their eating
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. All in all,
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 some career and financial success is attributed to hard
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 and not eating with family, it seems negative progress because of the problems associated with it. It is better to make a
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/life balance to enjoy a successful life
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 psychologically healthy as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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