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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. Do the advantages of this development outweight the disadvantages?

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In recent times, on accomplishing a bachelors degree,
students
 have
more
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 chances to study in foreign countries. Whereas, earlier they use to continue education in their own nation. In
this
 essay, I will be examining the merits and demerits of
this
development
 prior to the conclusion.
To begin
 with,
certainly
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 there are advantages of
students
 moving to abroad for continuing their education like getting exposure to the international competitive market, learning to survive and live independently.
Firstly
, they get an opportunity to share the classroom with pupils of
a diverse nations
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. It gives the opportunity to interact with these foreign
students
, interexchange new ideas.
Consequently
,
this
development
 does broaden their horizons and even it will be easier for them to work in the diverse and multicultural atmosphere of Multinational companies.
Secondly
, these
students
 learn to survive and live their life independently.
This
development
 will make them more responsible, value their dear ones and ultimately, benefits them to start the jobs in their future.
However
, there are certain disadvantages linked with obtaining higher education in
the
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other nations
such
 as indulging in crimes, a financial burden on the family, loss of contribution to their own country’s
development
. As the
students
 live without any supervision of parents, perhaps they get associated with crimes or
expoed
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exposed
 themselves to other wrongdoings like consuming drugs, drinking alcohol, etc.
Furthermore
, studying abroad costs a colossal amount of wealth that has to be paid mostly by their parents and eventually, it will be a financial burden on the family.
Besides
, it will be a loss for their own country as
usually
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 they intend to work and settle down in the new country. To elucidate,
although
 there are both genuine advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, the benefits of it surpass the drawbacks.
Subsequently
, on completion of studies, there
are
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multitude
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 of possibilities of supporting our nation in the form of bringing the innovations and advanced technology back home.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • intercultural competence
  • global network
  • financial cost
  • tuition fees
  • living expenses
  • cultural adaptation
  • homesickness
  • language barriers
  • bureaucratic challenges
  • residency permits
  • educational resources
  • teaching methods
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • problem-solving
  • resilience
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