Despite the benefits for health, fewer people today than ever before exercise by walking. Why is this problem? What can be done to encourage more walking?

Nowadays,
less
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people
are doing walking
exercise
which is
the
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one
of the physical exercises
although
, there are a
lot
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benefits for humans healthy.
This
essay will discuss the problems of why
people
do not do walking training and
also
,
this
essay will suggest probable solutions for encouraging
people
to do more walking practices.
First
of all,
people
have some reasons for why they do not do walking exercises and
one
of the causes are hard-working. The
people
must
work
hard for earning money. For ,example on ,average they
work
a job for about 8
hours
and add on their daily
lifetime
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a
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transportation and sleeping
time
which is
these
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are 2 and 8
hours
respectively so
that
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they do not have a lot of free
time
for doing
exercise
or hobbies.
Besides
,
one
of the major problems is the lack of an empty area. Most of the cities have a lot of construction like houses, apartments and shopping centres these days and
that is
why
people
sometimes do not find training areas when they want to do
exercise
. Because of these reasons, fewer
people
do
exercise
by walking.
One
of the possible solutions is fewer working times. Nowadays, most
people
do not find that free
time
for doing
exercise
and If
government
should get a working rule which is
people
can
work
most
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6
hours
in a day, they can find a free
time
for themselves.
In addition
, the
government
should do more
exercise
areas
instead
of doing construction.
In other words
, If
People
can find more than more areas, they can do more walking practices. In conclusion, while
people
have some reasons
such
as lack of free
time
and having empty area, especially
government
can help to take overcome these problems.
For example
, the
government
can do more practice zone and take a working rule which is employees can
work
most
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almost
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6
hours
a day.
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