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Due the advancement in computer technology the trend of working from home will bring a dramatic change to people’s lives. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

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Development in computer technology had made working from
home
 possible for the number of industries including health,software ,banking and service industry which enabled the life of those workers much comfortable but the view of people are different on
this
, some taking it as a positive trend while the others are counting it as a negative . I will elaborate pro's and cons of the topic in
this
 essay ,and in the final say would consider working from
home
 as a positive development for society. Software updates like windows 11 and other technical upgrades made it possible for employees of a number of industries to work from the comfort of
home
 avoiding the hassle of travelling to the job and back as well as left positive footprints on the environment and pocket of employees in the form of saving on fuel and insurance. Working from
home
 makes , a work-life balance for those employees as time saved from travel can be spent with family and kids and staying
home
 can avoid daycare problems where both partners are working.Break-time can be utilised for making healthy and nutritious food adding to good health. ,
Conversely
Add a comma
,Conversely
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this
 trend had negative effects, like lack of socialisation,no personal interaction with people which can add to social anxiety leading to psychiatric problems,
In addition
, no physical work at all can lead to health issues
such
 as cardiovascular and other diseases. Attending meetings and other social occasions now becoming a panic issue as they do not have crowd facing experience. To sum ,up work from
home
, in my opinion, has greater positive outcomes than adverse effects on peoples lives and personally will welcome
this
 development for a better environment.
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