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It is often said that we should work to live, not live to work. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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Most
people
 in the
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word
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 have to find
job
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, some
people
 think we should
work
 to live but not live to
work
,
this
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this
 view. On the one hand, there are two reasons why we should live to
work
. The main reason is that
live
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 to
work
 means
people
 love their
jobs
 so much that there is no clear line between
work
 and personal life.
For instance
, some scientists love their
jobs
 so much that they are willing to put most of their time
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 experiments. Another reason is that it can enhance the development of society. If everyone lives to
work
, they will put more effort
in
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 their
jobs
 as they think their lives are only for working.
Therefore
, the working efficiency can be increased.
On the other hand
, there are two reasons why we should
work
 to live.
Firstly
,
people
 can be motivated to
work
. When they
work
 to live, they hope to get a higher salary in order to have a better quality of living. So they will try to perform better in their
jobs
.
Moreover
,
people
 can enjoy other things in life, aside from their
jobs
.
Work
 to live means that once leaving the office, citizens can relax
themselves
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and focus more on other things,
such
 as their hobbies families and friends. They will not be too
stressful
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 or anxious as they just see working as a way to make money. To conclude,
work
 to live is better than live to
work
 as it can allow citizens to have a
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work- life
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 balance and they can have more time to spend on other categories other than
jobs
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • financial stability
  • personal development
  • career advancement
  • fulfillment
  • leisure
  • self-care
  • burnout
  • stress
  • setting boundaries
  • professional success
  • personal satisfaction
  • harmonious balance
  • purpose and structure
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