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Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

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 of the most controversial issues today relates to many young people are
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 graduate from high
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.
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, there are some people who suggest that before
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 attend
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, they should seek employment for a few years. So,
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 question from both points of
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. On the
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 hand, many commentators are of the
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 that there are disadvantages to taking a
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 for a few years between
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 and
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. From their point of ,
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 the children who choose to work for a few years find it difficult to find a relevant
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 in the future.
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 is because there may be a lot of competition for
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 positions,and the later you start working, the harder it may be to find a suitable
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. It is
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 maintained that these
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 may lose their habit of studying.
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 are usually used to studying long hours and
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 may make
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 life much harder.
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,there are those who subscribe to the
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 that working immediately after
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 has several benefits. They argue that the
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 can become independent. For ,example people who earn their own money can afford to rent their own flat. It is
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 believed that some of the money can be saved and used to pay for
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 tuition. Another advantage is that working gives the
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 some time to think about what would really like to study.
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 is very useful if the
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 is unsure about their future career. In my personal experience, there are disadvantages to working between
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 and
university
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.
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 significant merit is that
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 learn new skills that they can use in their future research. For ,
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example they learn to write a
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 report using a word processor. Another positive aspect of having a
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 before
university
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 is that having a
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 usually make the
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 interested in continuing education.
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 ,if each chooses their major more wisely. In conclusion,
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 working right after
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 might have some disadvantages, I believe the benefits are far more. Working before
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 has positive effects on
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's self-confidence and experience.
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