Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years it has become more and more popular for
people
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to shop for their needs and wants on the internet.
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may be because most
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prefer shopping from the comfort of their homes rather than going in person to the actual shops.
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, there are some drawbacks to
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I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages
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shopping online. One advantage of online shopping would be that at
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time of the year with covid and so on it is much safer for
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to shop online to protect themselves from the recent outbreak of covid 19. Another point about shopping online would be that you would have a wide variety of
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and discounts on all the
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so it will be easier to find the
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that you want. My final point on shopping online would be that while shopping online
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saves you loads of time to get more and more stuff done rather than going to multiple stores to get different
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On the other hand
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, online shopping can lead to multiple cases of fraud because most
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would input their credit card details on sketchy websites
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hackers stealing their money from their bank accounts.
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, a delay
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the arrival date of their
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could result in the
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arriving way after the initial date. My
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would be that you would not be able to see the
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on whether it's good or not so you would receive the
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and realise that
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isn’t what you
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wanted. To sum up, online shopping can have a negative impact on buyers, but it
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has many advantages. Personally, I think that online shopping saves precious time that we all need in our busy lives and you have a wider range of
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to choose from.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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