Some believe that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, while others claim that holding the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

In recent days, the public has had various

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views about the importance of the

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held annually by certain countries. Some groups of people think that the

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are a means of bringing peace

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many nations,

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some others think that it is merely a

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activity, and

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are still many parts of human life that should be improved. The following paragraph will discuss both views

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and convey my personal thought which I think money should be spent on other sectors, not on holding the

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. On the one hand, for some individuals, there are some reasons why the

Olympic

Games

could bring peace among nations in the world.

Firstly

, the

Olympic

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are a vast affair participated by most of the countries in the world.

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occasion gives space to the fella states to meet and commence communication.

Secondly

,

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situation has been believed to provide numerous opportunities for each nation to meet and talk.

For instance

, prior to the

games

or the competitions started by the host country, all

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are gathered in a hall to have dinner together.

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moment is normally used by them to talk and have some communication to understand one another among participants.

Therefore

, it is believed it could unite different regions.

However

, other groups of populations think that

this

event

is considered wasting money,

whereas

other parts of life should be put as a priority. The main reason behind

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is that frequently there are still countries that participate in the competition, are still categorised as poor states. The

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condition is when a country should be hosting the affair.

For example

,

according to

a report, reported by BBC News 2020, Indonesia spent 40% of

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annual income which is from the taxation allocated to

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the

event

,

whereas

, a number of regions in Indonesia are still suffering from hunger.

Thus

,

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affair does not bring benefit to the local people, yet

this

leads to poorer conditions. In conclusion,

while

several people argue that

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games

are deemed beneficial

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could bring distinct nations together, others believe that

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is merely wasting numerous amounts of money. Both sides have their own opinions. I personally agree with the latter argument that

this

is merely wasting of funds.