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Young drivers are careless and overconfident,and too many are killed in accidents. To eliminate this problem,we could teach children the skills of safe driving while they are at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Reckless driving by juveniles is more prone to accidents on the roads which have severe consequences on the safety of others. Owing to
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 that
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 of safe driving should be taught to children,
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,they study in
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school,
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, a few are against
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 proposition. I believe that theoretical parts should be included in schooling,but practical driving entails being taught after maturity. First and foremost, youngsters misuse their qualities. Since young blood
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new things,they do not care about the result of their actions so ,teaching about basic skills of driving becomes necessary prior to any mishappening.
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, workshops on traffic rules can be organized in educational institutes to prevent breaking any rule which leads to accidents.
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,skills taught at an early stage of life
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 in the minds of youngsters for a longer period. If
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theoretical knowledge about driving skills at school,he will never forget the things as at that time
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 has great retention power.
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, practical training is essential for getting expertise in safe driving. Since
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 is not allowed to drive legally before stepping into the adult stage,so,practical
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 can not be inculcated in the schools. To exemplify,if
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 theoretical
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 in school and does not have any pragmatic experience
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 it would not be enough to drive safely as
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 proverb Practice makes a man perfect.
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 can become confident in a particular field exclusively by practising.
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, other factors can
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 be considered to ensure safe driving
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 as monitoring the driving on roads by police, training
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adults in driving by experts
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 field etcetera.
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, in order to ensure safe driving theoretical
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 should be inculcated in the schools and practical training should be given to young adults.

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Task Response
Provide a clearer position in response to the question. Are you agreeing, disagreeing, or partially agreeing? Make sure this is evident throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a more clear introduction that introduces the topic and clearly states your position on the issue. Additionally, a stronger conclusion can help summarize the key points and reinforce your viewpoint.
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