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Band 7

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show average house hold expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers.

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The graphs demonstrate the expenses spent on household services and goods in two different countries, Japan and Malaysia, in 2010. Overall, it's clearly evident that Japanese household expenditures were more similar in their averages among the slices illustrated by pie charts in comparison with Malaysians expenses. In Japan, 29% of costs are spent on other activities and 24% on food goods while the Malaysian population used 26% and 27%, respectively, of their total financials funds. In both countries, health care didn't show great importance, having lower averages, 6% and 3%.
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, the transport system in Japan involved 20% of total funds spent meanwhile housing services had almost the same quantity of
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last
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 activity, with only 1% upper.
However
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, Malaysians housing expenses were the biggest slice of the pie chart with a portion of 34%, which it's possible to see
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 significant for their citizens. In a different way, the money used for transport activities were the
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-lowest portion of the total funds, illustrating just 10% of the pie chart.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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