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People think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion.

#people #government #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
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Environment
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The environment
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 issue is one of the biggest
wondering
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 among parent and many older people
in
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nowadays, many
believes
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 that
by
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increasing the fuel price can save the
environment
 from destruction. Well, from my point of view
I’m oppose
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 the ideas, by invest some attention to build more public transportation and make the tough rule or fine can helps for
environment
 issue. Not everyone
voluntarly
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voluntarily
 picking own transport as
first
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the first
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 thing, due to not
flexiblity
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flexibility
 using public transport is the reason why people considering
have
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 a car is a must for every individual after
certain
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 age. When the governments fail to build easier transportation for
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daily usage.The
intension
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intention
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 to help the
environment
 and to stop the over vehicle population will never happen.
By constructing
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 more door to door buses or nearby train
station
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stations
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 like in urban will be
a the
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first
 considerable options for the public to choose
before
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leave
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 the home.
Moreover
, every country organiser should
prepared
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prepare
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 some strict rules and fines for the human bad behaviours
especially
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in
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 the roads. In
this
 busy scheduled life, everyone will be rushed
to
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from one place to another place by not following the rules, and end up with more traffic or
sometime
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sometimes
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 even a major
accidents
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accident
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 can cost the heavy traffic or even a life. To avoid
this
,
government
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the government
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 can have more road cameras or more police
force
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in
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 main roads to capture the vehicle’s number and to take
a
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serious action on the particular person. In conclusion, The government should take efforts to
educated
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 the public but not to make the
petrols
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petrol
 price high which will not
going
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go
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 to change anything
to
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for
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 the public or
an
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environment
 but it will
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affect
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effect
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 the average income families for the daily survival.
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