Although most people are reacher than in the past, modern life seems very stressful and the number of people are suffering from stress is at record level. What are the main causes of stress in modern life and how could stress be reduced.

This
new age
life
is different from
past
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the past
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few decades that makes
people
suffer from
stress
. There are various problems for hectic
life
and
this
essay will discuss
few
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a few
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of the factors that
makes
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make
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people
stressful
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stressed
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.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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people
love to make money rather enjoying their
life
. The living cost has been increased which makes us
to
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apply
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run towards
a stressful jobs
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stressful jobs
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which pays a lot.
Moreover
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this
world become more competitive so that we forget to pursue our passion for doing something we are interested in.
As a
result
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,result
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it ends up in pressure and
stress
by doing hateful work without any interest
towards
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in
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it. For an instance, one who loves photography works in a corporate to earn his day to day living expenses because MNC will pay him more
comparatively
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compared
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to his passion.
This
may
stress
him by not doing what he loves. In
this
era, most of us are
apadted
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updated
to
this
situation which affects the society by pushing them into pressure.
Secondly
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most of the
people
are not finding the right job that matches their
qualification
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qualifications
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. The main reason for
this
should be the increase in
number
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a number
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of engineering colleges. There are as many colleges now and thousand of engineers are passing out every year but there are
no
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not
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as many job
vaccancy
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vacancy
which may
stress
the
youngstres
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youngsters
a lot.
This
can be controlled by not giving
permissions
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permission
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to some of the worthless institutions. So that students may find some other courses which
helps
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help
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them to get a job.
Finally
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I conclude
this
essay by saying that whatever we do there may be
stress
like worrying about our future or having some responsibilities that we find overwhelming. So we
ourself
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ourselves
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find some time to know about ourselves like what we need in our
life
to stay happy.
This
is the best possible solution to live a
stress less
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stress-less
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life
.
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