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The government should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The government should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are important. To what extent do you agree or disagree. There is a common belief asserting that lawmakers ought to provide every individual from
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 wage even at a bottom rate for their primary necessities in their lives. In
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however
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 I tend to disagree regarding the fact that a reduction from
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 country’s budget will allocate to these
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 that can be
instead
 spent on boosting
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 medical system. Some public debate, in order to maintain equality among all and avoid discrimination, people especially those from
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 levels should be regularly paid. To
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 more, they claim that
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 number of people can’t find a suitable job in the wake of unemployment and inflation so that higher authorities should not only ease the situation for them to get employed
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 but ought to make them self-sufficient by aiding them with giving money in their bank account.
This
 money presumably is diminished from high
taxes
 that workers and employees who are working 24/7. covering
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 population means larger
taxes
 should be imposed.
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, looking at
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 scale,
this
 solution wouldn’t be that
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effective. It is important fact that
health
care
 is human basic
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. If
government
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instead
 put
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 into funding
health
care
 systems by constructing medical buildings, there would be a valuable and positive change in
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society
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 well-being.
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, privileges are already owning many assessments and subsidizing these group
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 could somehow be effortless. Experiments
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 that when there are enough healthcare facilities with acceptable service there is less number of diseases flowing. ultimately citizens pay
taxes
 and supply
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decent healthcare so that we can maintain
health
care
, our biggest asset. To conclude, in many countries it is
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 factor for many people to be provided with
basic
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a basic
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 amount of payment. Even in terms of fulfilling their basic needs.
However
, there is
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 that
taxes
 are accumulating from each
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 of society.
health
care
 should take precedence over paying community.
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