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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production can preservation outweigh the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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In today's era of hurry and ,bustle no
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 has time to cook
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 and either they depend on ready-made
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 from restaurants or on pre-cooked
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 from large scale
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 manufacturers and
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 manufactured had
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 stored and transported to sellers ,so there is a large gap between production and consumption of
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 and to keep
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 in good shape and taste in process of manufacturing number of additive added as preservatives.Now the question arises,Is these preservatives are safe! I am not a hundred per cent sure about the safety of those ingredients but going to discuss them in the essay. From reading labels of some packaged foods , I found
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 substance named Sodium citrate as a preservative widely used and the majority of consumers take it as inert as claimed by the
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 industry and the producers got permission from the
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 and drugs department as a safe ingredient but actual long term effects on a wide range of diverse population and particularly on young and developing brains no
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 knows,so how much safe is questionable. Another example can be Vinegar(Acetic Acid) which is
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 consumed in the pickle industry, as a preservative and has no safety profile known so far. But for
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 ,industries these substances are life-saving boons which earns them lots of revenue as with the aid of these substances they can run their production smoothly and conveniently and make packaged
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 look safer and fresher. In , a conclusion I would like to say if we can avoid and find time to prepare fresh
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 for ourselves and for our family that will be the best choice as preservatives are for me something we should avoid as much as we can because hundred per cent guarantee of safety no
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 can provide, so for me benefits of preservation does not outweigh the disadvantage.
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