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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this opinion?

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At present time
crime
 and violence in society is on the rise and people are looking for acceptable but strong enough measures, which can control and eradicate
crime
 without eradicating
criminals
 , one offered solution is capital punishment which in its use will erase
crime
 and
criminals
 so all clear but I only partially agree with the death penalty and elaborate
further
 in
this
 essay. Of course , controlling
crime
 and violence is the biggest challenge for law enforcement bodies in the era of guns , drugs as well as hate
crime
 which contribute 90% of crimes,so there is the call from every corner of society for the strongest measures to bring those crimes down, some advocate for extended imprisonment for repeat offenders and for those,who commit grievance
crime
 ,but
this
 is not working for everyone because there are chances of meeting same minded people and come out after their jail period and give birth to organised
crime
 which is worst expected. so in final say some come up with capital punishment which goes live for life or if counts of the
crime
 beyond social acceptance
then
such
criminals
 will be awarded the death and at ,present it is normal rule for some countries in U.A.E. , it looks cruel but works great in controlling
crime
. In developed ,democratic countries advocates of human rights are raising the issue of human rights of life ,even for
criminals
 so its use is only a debate issue and
such
 penalties are not practical. In ,
the
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conclusion in my personal opinion it is better to have capital punishment for some cruel and repeat offenders who do not show any remorse for their
crime
 and when there is no chance of changing their criminal nature.
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