Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country?
Many
countries
are encouraging tourists
to visit their countries
. Although
an increase in tourist numbers could pollute the country
, I believe that tourism
can improve the economic state of a nation and also
spread knowledge about the country
to the rest of the world.
On the one hand, tourism
can lead to pollution of the areas that they cluster in groups. Since many countries
do not have strong policies against tourists
, many of them take it for granted and litter the surroundings without a
concern. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, a beach in
the eastern side of Sri Lanka lost its pristine beauty after being dirtied by foreign travellers. Change preposition
on
However
, this
is a fixable problem; the government can impose sanitary laws or do regular cleans
.
Replace the word
cleaning
On the other hand
, economy
of nations flourishes because of the increase in Add an article
the economy
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
tourists
. That is
to say that people spend a lot of money in the country
and fuel the economy. Many countries
like Dubai and Sri Lanka are heavily dependent on foreign visitors, because of the influx of the money they bring to the country
. In addition
, tourism
promotes the values of the country
to the whole world. When foreign dwellers go to a country
they not only perform leisure activities but also
experience the culture the nation has to provide. They post pictures and share experiences of the local culture to
their family and friends.
In conclusion, the disadvantage of Change preposition
with
tourists
polluting the country
is outweighed by the increase in financial support tourism
brings and the fact that it educates other countries
about its national attributes.Submitted by sajeendranrajakumar on
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task achievement
You have provided a clear and comprehensive response that addresses the prompt effectively. However, try to expand a bit more on the disadvantages to make the discussion more balanced.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph fully develops its idea; for instance, provide a little more insight into how the economy benefits from tourism.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively frame your essay, which makes your main points easy to follow.
supported main points
The main points in your essay are well-supported with relevant specific examples, such as the example of the beach in Sri Lanka.
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