It is considered that many people that guidance is the first teacher of every child life to teach everything to make a better citizen, while others think that school is a building where students can learn skills and become responsible people in society. In this essay, l will present both sides of the argument, including why I believe that academic education is important to become a real member of civilisation.

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It is considered that many people that guidance is the

first

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teacher of every

child

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life to teach everything to make a better citizen, while others think that school is a building where students can learn skills and become responsible people in society. In

this

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essay, l will present both sides of the argument, including why I believe that academic education is important to become a real member of civilisation.

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, children indeed are the main expression of their

parents

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. Since a

child

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is born until they go to preschool,

parents

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teach ample things to their

child

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moral values, cognitive skills to name but a few.

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of these values, children learn what is good or bad for them.

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, they imitate the actions of their

parents

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for the reason they become a role model for them. Not only

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, they have a good knowledge of every hook and corner of the world. So,

parents

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play a significant role to teach morality.

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, schools are

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responsible for growing a

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into a productive member of society. Nowadays, getting an education is a prime goal and

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only possible from an educational institution. Because schools can provide practical expertise which will be beneficial for a

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’s growth. Apart from it, studying in school, they can learn interpersonal skills

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as leadership, time management and discipline and

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they learn how to become a responsible citizen in the society. In conclusion,

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both have their importance I think that young ones should be educated by schooling because it has many merits in their progression.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

273 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Nowadays internet addiction become trend discuss about causes and effects for this problem

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