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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Advertising is prevalent
people
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 encounter advertising in almost every aspect of their lives,
although
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 some
people
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 are immune to advertising, I believe that advertising is essential for encouraging
people
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 to
purchase
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 promoted products or services. On the one hand, some
people
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 believe that advertising is so pervasive that
people
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 are less likely to be interested in it. It is the massive advertisements that reduce individuals interest in the
product
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 promoted, which makes
people
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 cannot commit a brand or products in memory. Were
people
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 not to remember the content of an advertisement, they would not
purchase
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 the item or services.
On the other hand
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, advertising is an important method to convince
people
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 to make a
purchase
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 because it enables
people
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 to understand the
product
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 and services in it. Advertisements can be informational and provide factual information about a
product
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 or
service
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,
such
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 as its benefits and performance. Customers can,
therefore
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, be apprised of the features of a
product
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 or
service
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, making sensible purchasing decisions.
In addition
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, advertising can arouse
people
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’s motivation to make a
purchase
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. By placing the
product
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 along with other items that can evoke positive affection,
such
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 as fresh flowers and cute animals, advertisers can easily manipulate viewers’ emotions about the
product
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, making them transfer their affection for one set of items to the
product
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 promoted. It is the positive feeling that boost the sales of the
product
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. In conclusion,
although
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 advertising is common and some
people
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 may not be interested in it, I think advertising is an effective technique to (promote a
product
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 or
service
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 这样写是不是就跑偏了 因为题目说的是买东西 ) convince customers to buy a
product
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 or
service
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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