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In many countries, people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Obesity among
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 is one of the greatest concerns among people in a number of countries and contributors can be a type of food as well as change in lifestyle and solutions can vary from child to
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 I will elaborate on both aspects of the issue in detail. More than 40 % of students in early learning grades in developed countries are overweight and
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 raises concern in parents as well as dieticians of the concerned population and is trying to look around the issue with possible reasons of it and what solutions they can come up with.The
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 and foremost cause they include is the fast-food eating habit of the schoolgoers with high sugary drinks , the
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 reason they count is the sedentary lifestyle of the
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 which do not give any physical activity to the students ,
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 these populations follow advertised high-density foods on the television by fast-food chains and that appealing taste increase their crave for
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 foods. For the solution I would like to suggest involving more activities in the classroom where students can have much needed physical activities ,like adding Zoomba classes twice a week,
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 periods of sports for at least 45to 60 minutes a couple of times a week,
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 parents can enrol their
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 for swimming classes or taekwondo classes during weekends and encourage them by rewarding with any positive achievement in sports with prizes. In , a conclusion overweight in childhood is a serious issue and it requires everyone's attention from parents to teachers and health care workers to help them come out from
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 trouble by providing sufficient nutrients and calories needed for their normal growth and development by steadily encouraging and diverting them towards physical activities.
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