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Some people think it is more important to plant trees in open areas of towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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As modernization and civilization have been processed,
people
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 need more houses and buildings. In response to these needs, a lot of housing is built at the moment.
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, the positive effects of planting
trees
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 in open areas of
towns
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 and
cities
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 outweigh the benefits of building more housing.
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 of all, I believe that
plants
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 can relieve the stress of residents in
cities
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 and
towns
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. A lot of
people
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 feel stressed and frustrated in the
city
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 which is packed with high-rise buildings.
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,
people
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 are likely to have a sedentary lifestyle nowadays.
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, green areas with
plants
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 give residents time to escape from complex
city
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 life and give places to move their bodies.
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, Han River parks and Seoul Forest parks are always crowded with
people
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 who want to enjoy the picnic and get close to the natural environment.
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 is why it is necessary to plant
trees
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 in the
city
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 and villages. Another reason is that green
plants
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 can function as air purifiers in the
city
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.
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, sufficient
plants
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 can purify bad air by absorbing carbon dioxide and giving us fresh oxygen. The
towns
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 where many
people
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 live are filled with bad air coming from cars and factories.
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, planting
trees
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 in open areas of
towns
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 and
cities
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 are more important and required than building more housing. To sum up, I reckon the value of planting
trees
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 are bigger than building more housing in
cities
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 and
towns
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 because the benefits brought from
plants
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 are very huge.
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