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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions on this?

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The international tourism industry has been growing vastly in recent years.
This
 growth has so many benefits for almost all the persons who are directly or indirectly involved in it.
However
, there are
also
 some serious drawbacks that can not be denied. As the population of the world grows, supplying the element needs of
this
 population becomes critical. Having a proper job and an average income is one of these needs. The tourism industry made various job positions that did not exist before, for ,instance Tour guides, Tour companies, Hotels,... .
Also
 the rate and limitation of jobs in local and destination places grow too, as a great potential for consumers (tourists) be added to the usual ones.
Moreover
, going and visiting new places, connecting with different races, merging in unknown cultures can reduce misapprehension and racist thoughts. One can know and connect to others in a living way with intimacy and it leads to a right understanding of each other,
instead
 of sitting behind TVs and receiving a limited amount of censored information that represent the political views of governments.
On the other hand
, you can not close your eyes to the mass of pollution and inhabitant destructions, unfair division of profits, destroying the wildlife and untouched natures and so other wrong actions and bad influences that come from the lack of necessary and important laws. By way of conclusion, I believe there are some bad impacts and drawbacks in the whole tourism system that should be considered and solved but they do not outweigh the global advantages and benefits of
this
 new industry.
Submitted by haniyeh.maghbooli.1992 on

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