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unemployment is one of the biggest problem of contempory society. What do you think are the main cause of unemployment.what Solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays in modern societies lack of Job has become a major problem.
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 essay will articulate some causes of
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 problem as new technology inventions and growing
population
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 and purpose some possible solutions to alleviate them. To commence with, one of the main
cause
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 of unemployment is technology. To explain it, many companies prefer to use
machines
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instead
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 of
human
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 because they think that
machineries
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machinery
types of machinery
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 work without any mistake.
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, a survey was conducted by
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the ‘worker
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 union’ in 2016, found that most of the people are jobless because most of the factories are using
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 of
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a human
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human
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. As a Solution,
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the government
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 should start new projects in which there is less use of
machines
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 so that individuals get
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the opportunity
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opportunity
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opportunities
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of
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job
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jobs
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Further more
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, another cause of unemployment is
growing
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the growing
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population
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 of the world.
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, due to
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the rise
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 in
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, employment is decreasing day by day because there
are
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 more
number of
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people as
compare
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 to
number
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a number
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 of jobs.
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, the article was published in ‘The New York Times’ revealed that there
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less
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fewer
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number
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 of jobs as
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 to
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population
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the population
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 in the world. To solve
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 problem,
government
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the government
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 should make strict laws against
growing
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the growing
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population
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 to provide jobs to individuals. In conclusion,
tere
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there
 are various causes of unemployment in
contempory
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contemporary
 society like technology and
population
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. So,
government
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the government
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 should make laws to control
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population
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the population
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 and start new projects in which
uses
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the uses
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 of
machines
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 are less

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