The world is heavily dependent on oil for energy. Do you think a future resource will take oil's place? Why do you think this?

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The discovery of

oil

has revolutionised the way humans function. It has replaced the

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centuries-old

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centuries- old

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reliance on animals

such

as horses for transport.

However

, the use of

oil

is harmful to the ecosystem. If it is used for a much longer time in the future, the ozone layer of

earth

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is likely to get thinner and disappear.

Thus

, I think there is a pressing need to focus on inventing new resources for sustainable development.

Firstly

, there are many means available to replace fossil fuels but they are not yet popularised and commercialised.

For instance

, Solar energy can be used almost anywhere where the Sun shines.

Similarly

, Wind and tidal energy can be used in places with strong winds and tides.

Moreover

, these resources are renewable and can be used for an indefinite period of time. With the consensus of the Governments and corporate institutions,

oil

can soon be replaced by another power.

Secondly

such

a shift is no longer optional but a necessity. As a consequence of rising pollution levels, there is a rise in environmental hazards like global warming.

Furthermore

oil

is not a permanent fossil fuel. Despite being largely used, it is

also

prone to depletion.

For example

, countries like UAE have understood

this

fact and moved the primary means of their income from

oil

to other businesses. Curiously enough,

the

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electric car companies like Tesla have seen a surge in demand in recent years. With

this

rising trend, it appears that people are more aware of

this

issue than before. In conclusion, the world indeed relies heavily on

oil

. But

this

trend is likely to change and a new resource will take its place soon. These resources are already available yet they are not being used on a large scale.

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