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Thr most important consideraion when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Everyone has a dream to achieve success in
life
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 which is quite hard and need effort,
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, the majority of the population always looking for lucrative employment after completion of their
education
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.
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, to some ,extent I deny the aforementioned statement because money is not everything for human beings. On the one hand, no doubt, sometimes
people
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 are unsatisfied with their
jobs
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 but they only stay there for higher wages because they know, it is extremely difficult to find a new job with that much wages, especially for women. The Harassment of women is a better example, at some offices women have to suffer from various circumstances, to run a house because sometimes, seniors of the office take advantage of their position to abuse the girls of their office. what is more, at some places to get well-paid
jobs
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 humans have to do extremely hard work like, lifting heavy weights or working with hot machines and they only prefer men in these types of
jobs
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, there is a great role of qualifications to achieve well-paid employment and some individuals are unable to afford higher
education
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,
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,
people
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 without
education
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 background have to suffer from unemployment. To illustrate, Multinational companies are giving satisfying salaries and
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, they only have a condition that the person should be well qualified.
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, masses who received a good amount will have ample opportunities in their
life
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 as they can give a better
life
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 to their children like
education
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 or luxurious lifestyle.
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, because of the rich
people
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, poor
people
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 are surviving on earth. Charity and volunteer works are an example of
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 Salman Khan, who is a Bollywood actor send 70% of his income to charity to give them
life
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. In conclusion, undeniably, higher salaries give happiness but behind ,
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 someone has to suffer a lot to achieve success in
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. So, it totally depends on the satisfaction of human beings.
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