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Some people say that Reading books improves imagination of people and improves their language skills while others say watching TV helps To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #books #imagination #language #skills #tv
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While
 some people believe that reading
books
 helps to build one's imagination and improve their
language
. Others argue that watching TV helps to attain
such
skills
.
Although
 it's true that
such
skills
 can be obtained
while
 watching TV or reading
books
, I strongly believe that it depends on the type of learner. On the one side, there are people who are able to learn something when they visualize it in their
brain
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. They are able to easily grasp anything they watch
in
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 the television, and it's retained in their memory forever.
Moreover
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 when they watch and listen to documentaries or news channels, they are able to expand their vocabulary and learn a new
language
, which ,
therefore
, improves their
langauage
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language
skills
.
However
, they may find it quite difficult to think or even slow to understand
while
 they read
books
.
For example
, a study that was conducted at a school showed that some students were able to achieve full marks in a test
,
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 when they studied school content through videos rather than reading
books
.
On the other hand
, there are others who can achieve those
skills
 when they read
books
. For them,
books
 which include fantasies,
helps
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 them to explore their imaginative capabilities, and through
that
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that,
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 they are able to enjoy the book more.
Furthermore
, learning new words through reading
,
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builds their vocabulary and
language
skills
, and in turn, they develop into a fast reader.
However
, they may find it difficult to achieve those
skills
while
 watching television. In conclusion, watching television or reading
books
 does help people to improve their
language
 and imagination,
however
, it entirely depends on what type of learner the person is.
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