Some people think that young children need to attend nursery before primary school. While others believe young children can spend all day at home. Duscuss both views and give your opinion.

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People are divided into two parts for ,how young
children
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should start their educational carrier, via
nursery
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or direct primary
school
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admission ,opponents and supporters of the view ,have a firm belief for their own ideas. In the essay ,I will elaborate on both options in detail, but in the end ,I think attending a
nursery
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should be more fruitful. Attending
nursery
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prior to going in primary
school
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give
children
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exposure to the same age and minded young candidates with whom they can play ,sing rhymes and do fun activities ,
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develop friendship and interaction without any restriction ,so allowing their natural way of development with giving early exposure of peer relations,
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these
children
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will work according to their age-related brain and skills but will get chances of practice before the actual
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,
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the skills will be well adopted and well practised ,
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they actually enter the
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with confidence,
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moreover
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attendance is not compulsory so they can skip whenever they are not comfortable, so freedom of attendance. If they directly go to primary
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they will go from parents training and care to primary teachers
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, they need to face new
children
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,teachers and environment out of sudden ,that may be shocking for some
children
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,can give more or less anxiety for
school
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and maybe negative attitude for attending
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,which may affect their
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performance. In ,
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conclusion I think nothing wrong with sending
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to
nursery
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before primary
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, rather than staying home all the time ,following parenteral care and jumping directly into primary
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without any training from non-parent professionals.
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