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In the past, school children usually learnt by listening to their teacher and by studying their books. Nowadays, many school children learn by using technology in the classroom instead. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In early times,
students
 were taught by teachers' speech and their lesson books, but now
students
 are more likely to learn through Internet resources. Some people argue that modern
technology
 helps children to study. I partially support
this
 viewpoint and I will elaborate my arguments in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, l accept that if we incorporate
technology
 into lessons
this
 will make teaching easier. To illustrate, in the past, it was extremely difficult to get various books, the latest
information
 and methods but we can find them in a short time with the help of websites or online libraries.
For instance
, the biggest website Wikipedia is made for people to learn new
information
 easily and there are tremendous different topics about various fields. Another reason why I support using sophisticated
technology
 in the classroom is its opportunities that assist individuals to understand and learn new knowledge efficiently. To look at the details, during a lesson, teachers may use smart boards, computers or projections to show obvious examples and it may contribute to some youngsters who have a visual memory.
For example
, if a lesson is related to seasons teacher may use visual aids
such
 as a presentation to show the differences between spring and winter.
Furthermore
, using the internet mitigates environmental pollution and deforestation because it does not require any paper.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 true that spending a lot of time in front of a screen may cause some urgent health issues
such
 as low eyesight.
For example
, the researches demonstrate that children with eyesight issues are seemingly increasing day by day with the contribution of technological devices
such
 as computers or telephones.
Moreover
, there is much
information
 and it sometimes causes overwhelming because
students
 can.not choose the correct and suitable one without teachers.
For instance
, there are many sites with incorrect
information
 which aim to cheat people
such
 as Workbook.
In addition
, finding everything easily leads to laziness around children because they need not to do research. In conclusion,
although
 I agree that
technology
 helps
students
 to improve, I
also
 hold the view that traditional lessons may help
students
 to learn more efficiently.
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coherence cohesion
Try to make the introduction more engaging and clearer by setting up the debate more explicitly. Consider summarizing the advantages and disadvantages in a brief sentence in the introduction to provide a clearer map for your essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea, and that the transitions between ideas and paragraphs are smoother to enhance the flow of your essay.
task achievement
The essay offers a balanced view of the advantages and disadvantages of using technology in education, supporting its points with relevant examples.
task achievement
The essay includes specific examples such as Wikipedia and visual aids in classrooms, enhancing the argument's relevance and credibility.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear conclusion that summarizes the main points and provides a personal stance on the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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