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Some parents think that helping their children with homework is good. Others think that children should do their homework on their own. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#parents #children #homework
Nowadays homework has become part of the routine for some school programmes where
students
 need to spend at least a couple of hours doing school-related activities and parents are divided over whether help children in finishing the task or let them do by their own,which is better . in ,following paragraphs will discuss both views in detail but I think we should let the
students
 do their
work
 and should be available for guidance rather than doing their
work
. school programs like cogito are famous for their approach towards homework,as they have incorporated lots of extra schoolwork in their curriculum and
students
 are required to finish everyday home assignments to score better in their grades,which is tiring and boring for them,but it's better for development ,the more they
work
 harder the better their level of education,
moreover
 wide range of topics in-home activities broadens their knowledge horizons,
additionally
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 it will make them fluent in writing,reading and drawing skills,
Furthermore
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this
 working habit will prepare them for the future job market with long working hours and after-hour meetings. Now consider about helping them do their
work
 ,which will make them dependent on others for their own
work
 ,taking away extra practice and sharpening skills which designed for the
students
 considering his or her class performance,means by giving helping hand ,parents will hinder their own children. Home topics are for meaning and assisting or finishing that
work
 for
students
,in my ,opinion will take them nowhere,except making them idle. so, in the final say,I would let the
students
 do their own business but will support them by staying with them and providing guidance whenever they need it, Eventually getting them ready for the future by themselves.
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