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The two maps below show as island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show as island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps depict the development of an
island
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 before and after the building of accommodation facilities for welcoming tourists.
Overall
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,
while
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 the above picture illustrates how the
island
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 was before the construction, the map below shows the creation
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of tourism
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tourism
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tourist
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 attractions and living accommodations. In the past,
beside
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besides
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 the small groups of palm trees
in
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on
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 the east and
west
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 of the
island
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, the
overall
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 spaces were empty.
According to
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 the construction plan, the piers of landing boats were established in the south of the
island
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 which is
also
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 the beginning point of the vehicle road. The track leads to the reception centre and ends at the new restaurant which is located near the sea. The residential areas were built to the east and
west
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 of the reception centre. Regarding the accommodation in the
west
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 which is nearer to
beach
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the beach
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 than the living area to the east of the reception, it was constructed surrounding the existing palm trees. Each house
in
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on
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 the eastern side
walk
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walks
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 to each other via footpaths.
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 is
also
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 the same for the
the
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apply
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west
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 housing area which is
also
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 connected directly to the beach and a swimming facility. Even though many human buildings were created on
this
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island
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, no natural resources were cut down
nor
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or
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 destroyed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, west with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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