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Nowadays it is more important to plant trees in open spaces in towns and cities than building houses. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In modern society, environmental
issues
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 are the most
concerns
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.
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, there is a belief that it is more important to plant
trees
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 in open
areas
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 in towns and cities than
building
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build
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houses
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. It is clear that greenery
areas
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 are vital to
solve
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solving
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 environmental
issues
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,
thus
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,
this
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 idea should be supported. The
first
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 aspect to point out is that air pollution is becoming a serious issue. It is a fact that
trees
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 can reduce carbon dioxide and reproduce oxygen.
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 air pollution causes other
issues
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such
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 as extreme weather due to global warming and health
issues
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.
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, if carbon dioxide was reduced by increasing the number of
trees
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 in the city, the level of global warming would
also
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 decrease.
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, the cases of natural disasters due to extreme weather would decrease.
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,
people
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 who suffer from health
issues
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 which are related to air pollution would decrease. Another important issue is that planting more
trees
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 can beneficial for the
land
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 where
people
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 live. It is a fact that the roots of the
trees
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 can make the
land
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 stronger.
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, there are fewer cases of
land
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 slidings.
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, in Japan, many
people
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 have lost their
houses
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 due to
this
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 issue.
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 some think that building
houses
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 are more important, as far as I am concerned, improving the value of
land
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 is more vital in order to build
houses
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 safely. To conclude, planting more
trees
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 in towns and cities are more essential than building
houses
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. If there were more greenery spaces in residential
areas
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, the environmental
issues
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 would be solved.
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 would be beneficial for
people
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 in terms of their health conditions and safety
areas
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 for living.
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