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‘All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school.’ How far do you agree with this proposal? How important is it for a child to learn a foreign language?

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It is almost universally accepted that individuals should start learning
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another language
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 when they are at a young
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.
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, the concept might have flaws in some ways. First of all, it is
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 fact that every child has different degrees of learning speed.
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, the idea that every
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 as soon as they start
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school
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 brings consequences for some students including failure to
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 their own
language
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. Increased pressure to
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other
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language
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 may
grow
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 the
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 of inadequate attention to
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 their mother tongue. Since
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 is the
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 of learning classes, it is possible that children may fail other
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 subjects as well.
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, beginning to learn a
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 later than the first grade doesn’t necessarily have unfortunate results. In Japan, an interesting
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 has been conducted. One
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 has started teaching a
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 from their primary
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 and the other has started from the middle
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. When participants graduated high
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, the students who started learning a new
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 from middle
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 had not just the same skills, but some of them even exceeded
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the students who started learning from elementary
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 suggests that starting at
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ages
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 doesn’t have substantial effects
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 learning
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. Admittedly, I agree with those who believe to
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 a new
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 at a young
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 is imperative. As Nelson Mandela once
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, “If you speak to a man in a
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 he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to his own
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 that goes to his heart”. Without a doubt, there are delightful advantages. Namely, to widen
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 to learn things, to have more career options and to improve the
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,
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 aspiration when it comes to every child.
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, children’s different levels of learning speed and
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the indifferent
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 result of starting to learn at a young
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 or a later
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 are the main causes that
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 it wouldn’t
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 for every child.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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