The number of older people is increasing. Some people think that this will cause problems in their countries; others believe this group is important to society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Nowadays
Correct your spelling
senior
senioer
Correct article usage
the senioer
show examples
citizens population has increased across the globe. Along with
age
we gain
atmost
Correct your spelling
almost
experience which helps to overcome
may
Correct your spelling
many
show examples
situations, but it
also
includes many
health related
Add a hyphen
health-related
show examples
ailments that
needs
Change the verb form
need
show examples
to be taken
care
of and personal attention is
also
must to look after them. A group of
people
state that elder
people
are equal to building more concerns
where as
Correct your spelling
whereas
show examples
others say it is always advantages to have them around us.
This
essay will throw some light
of
Change preposition
on
show examples
both
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
possibilities.
To begin
with, along with growing
age
people
tend to gain enormous experience of handling tough situations they are good at
understanding
Add an article
the understanding
an understanding
show examples
problem from the root and will explain the cause, will
also
provide valuable suggestions to overcome.
for
instance
Add a comma
,instance
show examples
in most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
families which
consists
Change the verb form
consist
show examples
of all
members
of all ages (including
Correct your spelling
newborn
show examples
new born
Correct your spelling
newborn
show examples
babies)- grandparents tend to take
care
of babies far better
then
Replace the word
than
show examples
parents.
There
Correct your spelling
These
show examples
small home remedies
also
are very helpful in preventing small
health
issue
Fix the agreement mistake
issues
show examples
of
infents
Correct your spelling
infants
.
Not
Correct your spelling
Note
show examples
also
that, If any family
memeber
Correct your spelling
member
is facing any financial or
health related
Add a hyphen
health-related
show examples
issue and if it is
disscussed
Correct your spelling
discussed
with them they come out with valuable resolutions. Mostly old aged
people
are considered as pillars of home and will be as effective to the community,
country
Add an article
the country
show examples
also
.
On the other hand
, with growing
age
Add a comma
,age
show examples
people
may get
health
ailments like blood pressure, diabetes or any other sickness due to lack of immunity power they are less resistant to these diseases and tend to rely on other family
members
, which leads to burdening of the other family
members
. In some
cases
Add a comma
,cases
show examples
older
people
tend to behave like small kids they need special attention in
such
cases. As most of the family
members
are occupied with
there
Correct your spelling
their
show examples
own
work space
Correct your spelling
workspace
show examples
they will be unable to take
care
of
there
Correct your spelling
their
show examples
elders.
This
may lead to sending them to old
age
homes
also
, where they may or may not be taken
care
of which is a heart-felt situation. To conclude, In my opinion for a family or a society to run and operate smoothly, flawlessly it should have a balanced combination of elders, aged and youngsters.
The
Change preposition
With the
show examples
combination
all
Change preposition
of all
show examples
these classes of
people
we can lead a
successfull
Correct your spelling
successful
life.
Submitted by mad143sree on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: