In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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prepared

meals

, and sugary drinks are getting popular among people.Most of the

store

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prepare them fast and sell them at

reasonable

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price

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. In my opinion, developing in

these fast-

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this fast-food industry

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food

industry can damage our health more than the benefits that we receive from it. on the one hand, there are some benefits to using fast

food

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the

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are prepared so quickly, so

instead

of spending a lot of time making

food

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past, they might save our time for other reasons.

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, we may be more productive in the workplace because thinking about

wthat

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what

shloul

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should

make for lunch, dinner, or other

meals

distract our energy from focusing on work to other things.

Also

, we could spend more time with our family or any persons that we love them

such

as our kid...

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, the

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food

industy

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industry

is one of the most prominent

entrepreneus

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entrepreneurs

entrepreneur

in the world. Millions of people are working in

this

areaand

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area and

have income. As an example, many international students work in fast

food

for the

frist

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first

year of student and pay their university tuition via

these kind

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of job.

As a result

, fast

food

might have advantages that we should not ignore.

On the other hand

, there are several reasons why fast

food

, prepared

meals

... are harmful to our health.

Fristly

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First

, they have full of fat and calories. So, they often

cause

gaining weight.

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, one Macdonald's

cheeseburge

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cheeseburger

has about 600-kilo calories

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is too high

in contrast

to healthy foods.

Secondly

, most fast

food

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prepared

meals

,...have high salt content that

cause

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blood pressure (hypertension).

Doctor

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usually recommend their patient not

eat

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high salt

food

. My friends with hypertension

usually

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called emergency

helper

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when they eat fast

food

(because the

bood

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blood

pressure went up).

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, these

food

are the

cause

of high cholesterol in

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elderly

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particularly and

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of heart attack, so well-

deing

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problems are more important than other

acpects

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aspects

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's advantages. In

conculsion

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conclusion

, while fast

food

maybe has benefits, especially for entrepreneurs , its damages are more bad effect on our

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Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Introduction & conclusion present

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In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some say that students should not be exposed to teachers' opinions on social and political issues in the classroom. Others, however, think that it is helpful for students to hear various perspectives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You recently travelled with a certain airline. Write a letter to the manager about your experience. Please say – Where and when did you travel? – What did you like or dislike? – What can you suggest for improvement?

Environmental problems are too big for individual countries or individual people to address. In other words,we have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The use of social media, e.g. Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-face contact for many people in everyday life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.