Working long hours causes a great deal of stress and can be very bad for one's health. VinMec’s top management must find a way to reduce this type of stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Working long hours causes a great deal of stress and can be very bad for one's health. VinMec’s top management must find a way to reduce this type of stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

14.With computers and the Internet, people can study and work without going to school or a company. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by providing at least six years of free education for each child, so that all children can read, write and use numbers.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

people should only buy food sourced locally.what are advantages and disadvantages?