Nowadays, internet and television has given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples

It is often said that social media and TV give the opportunity to many folks to become widely known. I would argue that
this
trend has both advantages and disadvantages. Never before have we seen so many
celebrities
on TV and social media.
First
and foremost, I believe that many people have grasped
this
opportunity and
became
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famous and rich.
Also
, today`s young adults have been inspired by those
celebrities
and want to do the same thing
instead
of working or studying in a university.
This
rampant trend has a detrimental effect on our society because we changed our ambitions and we praise people who do not worth our attention
neither
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or
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the wages they get. These uneducated
celebrities
make millions of euros every year, while others who were studying all their life do not earn so much. A clear illustration of
this
could be said to be, that the most famous TikToker earns more money than the vast majority of CEOs in Wall Street.
On the other hand
,
this
gave the possibility to others to do it for a living. In my ,opinion
this
is legit and a win-win situation because they could not do anything else in their life and entertain the viewers.
In addition
to that, I am of the belief, that the
celebrities
on television are more talented than those on the internet. Except for
this
, many of them are
also
educated.
This
makes television shows more prestigious than Youtubers or TikTokers. A clear example of
that is
Giorgos Karakostas, who has a TV show on a Greek channel. Giorgos Karakostas has 2 bachelor degrees and a master as well, and his show always is so instructive in many aspects because he talks about history and politics in every episode. To sum up, in
reality
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the advantages and drawbacks resemble two sides of one coin, which usually runs parallel. I think that social platforms should
premulgate
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new legislation in order to make our society less capitalistic in those aspects.
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